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Blurb for my novel. Any opinion?

November 7th, 2016 at 01:40 pm

Totally off topic again, I know! I'm prepping to self pub my first novel.

(inspired by the people at

Text is www.kboards.com and Link is
www.kboards.com, if you're interested, too.)

There's a lot to think about. Editing, story, covers, back cover copy. Blurbs, review copies.

Here is the blurb I've written to advertise/summarize the book. Any thoughts? I've already posted some cover options and many of you were gracious enough to vote for your favorites.

Blurb:

Seventeen-year-old Jess sees the killer in visions. He's a shadow, striking down the helpless, killing with lightning-like energy. After she finds the body of one of his victims, Jess fears the vision of her own violent death will come true.

To survive, she'll have to learn to control the newfound powers surging within her. Jess is the new kid in Salt Creek, an isolated town in rural southern Ohio with a ferociously guarded secret. Its residents are not ordinary humans, and they're changing Jess into something more like them. Billy, an outcast with an unsettling past, is the only one willing to explain her transformation as he guides her through the town's secret world.

As the killer's body count ticks higher, a growing pile of evidence links Billy to the crimes. Jesse has to decide if Billy is dangerous or has been framed, as she pieces together the clues to identify the killer before it's her turn to die.

8 Responses to “Blurb for my novel. Any opinion?”

  1. twest Says:
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    I think it sounds wonderful. It would definitely make me want to pick it up to see what is going on and how it ends.

  2. Carol Says:
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    I lime the blurb too.

  3. Carol Says:
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    Edit:I like the blurb too.

  4. scottish girl Says:
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    I like it!

  5. debt-free by thir-ty Says:
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    It sounds intriguing, but I almost feel as if the powers part should come first. Starting with the 'Jess is the new kid in town....To survive, she'll have to learn to control the newfound powers surging within her (maybe adding a transition like 'especially when a killer threatens the town)...And then the first paragraph, followed by the last.

    Not sure if that makes much sense or doesn't mesh with the story, but it's just one non-writer's opinion.

  6. ceejay74 Says:
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    I love it! But I also think it could be rearranged to give context first...I wasn't sure whether she gets the visions first or realizes she's gaining powers first, so the below might be out of whack. but hopefully something to work with.

    Seventeen-year-old Jess is the new kid in Salt Creek, an isolated town in rural southern Ohio with a ferociously guarded secret. Its residents are not ordinary humans, and they're changing Jess into something more like them. Billy, an outcast with an unsettling past, is the only one willing to explain her transformation as he guides her through the town's secret world.

    Then Jess begins to see a killer in visions. He's a shadow, striking down the helpless, killing with lightning-like energy. After she finds the body of one of his victims, Jess fears the vision of her own violent death will come true.

    As the killer's body count ticks higher, a growing pile of evidence links Billy to the crimes. Jesse has to decide if Billy is dangerous or has been framed. Jess must piece together the clues to identify the killer and learn to control the newfound powers surging within her before it's her turn to die.

  7. LuckyRobin Says:
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    Yeah, I feel you should lead off with Salt Creek as well. I'd swap out the word ferociously for fiercely and I'd put Jess's last name and Billy's last name in with the first use of each. I'd definitely want to read it.

  8. ThriftoRama Says:
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    Awesome advice, y'all. you should do this professionally. Wink

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